Uzowulu: Anger Management Help?

As the title says, my character was Uzowulu, and my monologue was based on the scene on pages 64-66. Here is the "script":

Fathers, I am Uzowulu, and my hand has touched the ground.  Today, I ask that all of you listen and pass judgment on my saddening story.  My wife Mgbafo, is the beautiful young lady standing over there.  I married her nine years ago with my own hard work and money.  I never cheated my in-laws any money or any yams, nor did I ever consider doing so; yet, how do they repay me? They break into my home, beat me to an inch away from death, and steal my wife and children away from me!  Two weeks!  I waited patiently for my wife to return for two whole weeks, yet she never came home even once.  She could have at least brought the children to see me!  So, I had no choice but to go find her at her in-law’s place.  I begged them...yes, me of all people, on my knees, to let Mgbafo come home with me.  Despite my humble acts, they refused me and even threatened to beat me if I did not leave.  So, I had to ask them to AT LEAST return the bride price.  But those greedy fools! Once again, they responded with nothing but anger and violence! If they were going to take away my wife, they could AT LEAST show the respect to return the money that I paid for her! 

So, today I bring this case to you.  I hope you understand that the reason why I asked for the return of the bride price was not because I no longer love her, but because her family won’t let her return!  I understand that perhaps in the past, I may have been a bit overly harsh in punishing her.  But I can promise you that if she comes home, I will never harm her ever again.  Also, if she were to come home, not only would I forget all the harm that her family has done to me, but I’ll even give them my largest pot of wine as a gift.  All I ask, fathers, is that you ask them to give me a chance.  Fathers, my case is finished.  No matter what your decision may be, I will respect it.  Fathers, I salute you.

I sort of changed and made up sentences during the presentation, but I tried to retain as much of it as possible. =]